Post by Felicia Hf on May 25, 2016 16:07:29 GMT -6
I have a feeling saying this sort of defeats the point of using second person point of view... I feel like I can't really relate to the story as much as if it had been first or third person. Maybe it's simply because I'm not used to reading second person, but I think it hinders the telling of the plot. Also I don't like being told "you look like this", because I immediately end up thinking "no, I don't!"
It does make an interesting read, and it's written very well, but I don't think the point of view works. ..Though I can't think of any story where second person POV actually works, so I don't think that's a thing to worry about!
Post by angietrafford on May 26, 2016 5:18:53 GMT -6
That was the opinion that I had when I wrote it. I can't even remember reading a story in the second person point of view in the first place. Not in fiction anyway. Has anybody got any examples of this?
I know it is supposed to make you become a part of the story, but it just did not feel like that when I was writing it. Mind you, you said that you thought it was written very well so I am happy that I actually managed to pull it off. Still not convinced it involves a reader very much at all! I thought it was just me.
I remember reading a Choose Your Own Adventure story when I was young, but I can't remember what it was called. There a quite a few of those out there, but I think they are mainly children's books.
By the way, I think maybe if you changed the story to present tense it would involve the reader more. I can't say whether that actually works, but I have a feeling that it would feel more like roleplaying and the reader would be more likely to play along.